Is this a good poem?

I just call this one



Elaine



I close my eyes and see you there,

Like in a photograph.

A smile is creeping up your face,

You are about to laugh.

I see you standing on a hill,

The top is nearly flat.

The bluebirds sit atop your head,

Just like a storebought hat.

Your crimson hair about your head,

In sunlight shines of red.

Your jaded eyes so clear and bright,

Pulls my gaze from your head.

The trees so tall, behind you stand,

The leaves are emerald green.

The lovely visuage of you there,

Is more than I have seen.

I see the pretty butterflies,

Of orange and of black.

I see the fields of flowers, wild,

I see a large haystack.

As night descends upon this land,

A radiance do I see,

It outshines all the stars and moon,

It shines out to the sea.

The fireflies sit within your hair,

And blink their love for you.

And all the world should see you now,

The way that I now do.

Is this a good poem?
The woman with my name is lucky to have such a poem dedicated to her. My grandfather was born in Phila., PA, but most of his family came from England by way of Ireland. Many of his descendants had/have red hair and sky-blue or green eyes.
Reply:Loved it - the "beloved" is surrounded and enfolded within the colors of nature. It reminded me of the sky - in daylight - with all the animals and tree and flower colors. Then again - at night - with the fireflies as stars. There are no fireflies - where I live - I surely would like to see them in action !!!
Reply:Cute...I like it! However, you say "head" as the ending word to two different lines. Revise that, but otherwise, it's awesome!
Reply:Elaine should be so lucky.Beautifully written, I think I know her by your writing.
Reply:Dondi I say that's the best poem i have ever herd! I can image me there Can you make more poems? I suggest you do one about the city!
Reply:This is a beautiful poem for a very lucky lady!
Reply:Well, I would be very flattered if I inspired someone to write this!
Reply:Yes, this is a good poem. It's a beautiful poem too.
Reply:Wow, it's excellent! Great job!
Reply:Yes.