Wednesday, February 15, 2012

Is this and A paper????

im writing a report on Nevada and need to know if this is good. It will say look here for pics but there on a cologe so these are just words...









Nevada





The state of Nevada was claimed as the 36th state on October 31, 1864.Thats when it became an official state. Nevada’s nicknames are Sagebrush State, Battle Born State, and the most known nickname is the Silver State. The meaning of the name of our state “Nevada” is snow-capped in Spanish. Here are some facts about Nevada; the population is about 1,998,257 people. It’s the 35th largest state (2000 census). Nevada’s Capital is Carson City. The state bird is the Mountain Bluebird and the state animal is the Desert Bighorn. The state flower is Sagebrush and the state tree is Single-leaf Pinon and the Bristlecone Pine. Our state precious gemstone is the Virgin Valley Black Fire Opal. The state song is Home Means Nevada.



Home means Nevada, Home means the hills. Home means the sage and the pine. Out by the Truckee’s silvery rills. Out where the sun always shines. There is the land that I love the best, fairer than all I can see. Right in the heart of the golden West, Home means Nevada to me.



Our state colors or silver and blue. And the state flag has a green reef looking type of thing on it with yellow flowers. Its says Nevada under a white star. Above the white star there is a scroll saying battle born. The background color of the flag is navy blue.

Our states motto is “all for our country.”





Here is a picture of what our state looks like,

Here is a picture of Carson city, our capital.









Nevada is the home of the wild mustangs, which is one of my favorite things about the state.







Nevada is bordered by Utah,Arazona,California,Oregon, and Idaho.





Here is a timeline of dates that are important to

Nevada.









? 1821 Mexico claimed the area after a successful revolt against Spain.

? 1840's Americans on the way to California traveled through the region.

? 1848 Nevada was part of the area ceded by Mexico to the United States.

? 1849 The first non-Indian settlement was made at Mormon Station (Genoa).

? 1850 When Utah Territory was organized, almost all of present-day Nevada was included except the southern tip, which was then part of the New Mexico Territory.

? 1859 The Comstock Lode of gold and silver was discovered at Virginia City, and many miners began coming from California.

? 1861 Congress created Nevada Territory. In 1862 the territory was enlarged by shifting the eastern boundary.

? 1863 Nevada became a state. In 1866 and 1867 more eastern land was gained from Utah Territory and the southern tip was acquired from Arizona Territory.

? 1880 - 1890 As the Comstock Lode declined, the state's population fell from 62,000 to 47,000.

? 1900 The discovery of silver at Tonopah, soon followed by gold strikes at Goldfield and the discovery of copper at Ely, led to a new mining boom that lasted until after World War I.





Those are some very important history dates of Nevada.





Here are all the cities in Nevada

Alamo

Town Lincoln

Amargosa Valley



Arden



Ash Springs



Austin



Baker



Battle Mountain



Beatty



Beowawe



Blue Diamond

CDP

Clark

Boulder City

City



Bunkerville

CDP Clark

Cal-Nev-Ari

CDP Clark

Caliente



Carlin



Carson City

City

CDP smallest CDP in the state

Cold Springs



Crescent Valley



Crystal



Crystal Bay



Dayton



Delamar Ghost Town



Denio



Duckwater



Dyer



East



Ely



Elko



Empire



Enterprise

Town

Clark



Eureka



Fallon



Fernley



Gabbs



Gardnervillle

Town



Gardnerville Ranchos



Genoa

Town



Gerlach



Glenbrook



Glendale

CDP Clark

Golden Valley



Goldfield



Goodsprings

CDP Clark

Hawthorne



Henderson

City Clark

Hiko



Imlay



Incline Village



Indian Hills



Indian Springs

CDP

Town

Clark

Jackpot



Jarbidge



Jean



Jiggs



Johnson Lane



Kingsbury



Las Vegas

City Clark

Lamoille



Laughlin



Lemmon Valley



Logandale

Town Clark

Lovelock



Lund



McDermitt



McGill



Mesquite

City Clark

Minden

Town



Moapa Town

CDP Clark

Moapa Valley

CDP Clark

Montello



Mount Charleston

CDP Clark

Nixon



North Las Vegas

City Clark

Orovada



Overton

Town Clark

Owyhee



Pahrump

Nye



Panaca



Paradise



Paradise Valley



Pioche



Primm

Clark

Rachel



Reno

City Washoe



Round Hill Village



Round Mountain



Sandy Valley

CDP Clark

Schurz



Searchlight

CDP Clark

Silver Peak



Silver City



Silver Springs



Sloan

CDP Clark

Smith



Spanish Springs



Sparks

City Washoe



Spring Creek



Spring Valley

CDP

Town Clark



Stateline



Summerlin South

CDP

Town Clark



Sun Valley



Sunrise Manor

CDP

Town Clark



Sutcliffe



Tonopah



Tuscarora



Verdi



Virginia City



Wadsworth



Wellington



Wells



West Wendover



Winnemucca



Whitney

CDP

Town Clark



Winchester

CDP

Town Clark



Yerington



Zephyr Cove







Nevada has a lot of beautiful scenery look here.

One thing you guys might know about Nevada, is Sarah Winnemucca. This is what the wikipedia says about her in the first paragraph, Sarah Winnemucca (born Thocmentony, Paiute: Shell Flower )which is now western Nevada… (ca. 1841 – October 17, 1891) was notable for being the first Native American woman known to secure a copyright and to publish in the English language. She was also known by her married name, Sarah Winnemucca Hopkins, under which she was published. Her book, Life Among the Paiutes: Their Wrongs and Claims, is an autobiographical account of her people during their first forty years of contact with explorers and settlers.

Sarah was a person of two worlds. At the time of her birth her people had only very limited contact with Euro-Americans; however she spent much of her adult life in white society. Like many people of two worlds, she may be judged harshly in both contexts. Many Paiutes view her as a collaborator who helped the U.S. Army kill her people. Modern historians view her book as an important primary source, but one that is deliberately misleading in many instances. Despite this, Sarah has received much positive attention recently for her activism. She was inducted into the Nevada Writers Hall of Fame in 1993, and in 2005 a statue of her was added to the National Statuary Hall Collection in the U.S. Capitol.

That says a lot about her. Sarah Winnemucca is very well known for bringing peace between Americans and Indians. Nevada is well known for her. Because she was born in what is now western Nevada. She is now in the Nevada hall of fame.





Nevada is apart of the Great Basin desert. You can see many miles of beautiful mountains, sagebrush, animals, and so much more!!! Nevada has one of the lowest average rainfalls out of the fifty states: nine inches. You may have heard the poem Mountains as Islands which says the following,



Mountains as Islands

Each range here is like a warship standing on its own, and the Great Basin is an ocean of loose sediment with these mountain ranges standing in it as if they were members of a fleet without precedent, assembled at Guam to assault Japan. Some of the ranges are forty miles long, others a hundred, a hundred and fifty. They point generally north. The basins that separate them-ten and fifteen miles wide-will run on for fifty, a hundred, two hundred and fifty miles with lone, daisy-petalled windmills standing over sage and wild rye. …Discounting the cry of the occasional bird, the wailing of a pack of coyotes, silence-a great spatial silence- is pure in the Basin and Range. It is a soundless immensity with mountains in it.

-John McPhee

Basin and Range, 1980

Is this and A paper????
I can't read it all, but from what I skimmed it seems like you're just bulleting. Try listing in more creative ways.
Reply:Okay, I have to admit, I got half way down..... skipped some, read some more... then skipped some.



Work on your orginization and grammar. Other than that, I can imagine writing about Nevada wasn't very exciting (As it wasn't very exciting for any of us to read) but Good Job!!
Reply:a report on nevada or something
Reply:To be honest, right now it is not a A paper. But it can be. Just a twiking with the words, spell check and a little bit more interesting facts about Neveda. right now it is a high C or Low B. depending on what grade your in.
Reply:This is a good paper, especially for 4th grade. But ways to improve would be to "shortlist" the points. I.E. cut down on the bullet points, and dont list them as bullet points. Explain them each in a sentence and explain about them.



Also, at the end end with "to conclude," or "in conclusion" and sum up the paper and the point you are making in writing the paper, and the most important bit of your conclusion, your opinion!



GOOD LUCK!



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Reply:You have a lot of spelling and grammar errors that would preclude you from getting an A. Also, this reads like you simply copied information from a bunch of books or from the Internet. Nothing original.



It's a weak C paper at best.
Reply:This paper has alot of interesting ideas, but you have to put them into complete thoughts. I just seems like a rumbling on of ideas. Make it more like a story. Choose some of the most important things that stood out to you and expound on them.
Reply:It just looks like random stats.. hard to read, very unorganized! %26gt;.%26lt;
Reply:I didn't read the whole thing but what I did read was actually pretty good! I really liked. I would grade it as a B or an A.
Reply:What grade is this for?
Reply:sorrry i fell asleep
Reply:You really need to find someone to edit this. There are typos, spelling mistakes, and grammatical errors everywhere. Here are a few things you should never do in formal writing.



-Use personal pronouns.

-Use multiple exclamation points.

-Use wikipedia as a source.

-Create lists of irrelevant information.
Reply:As a substitute I would think you have to do a bit more work.



Please specify why those people or places are important %26amp; what roles they did.
Reply:I thought it was a little labored. You have to lose yourself in the moment and loosen up.
Reply:I'm surprised you think someone would read that whole thing.
Reply:Based upon spelling, grammar, and sentence structure, I would have to say it is not going to get you an "A".
Reply:Good Job, it's really good. You could get an A- or an A on it. Depending on your teachers view. I would give you an A-.



If your in grade 7+ you will get something above 85% for sure
Reply:C- Try to pull your facts together a little more...
Reply:It would depend on the course and grade level. There is too much summary and not enough of your own analysis. Try breaking it up into more paragraphs, too.



Do not create such large lists, either. Good luck!
Reply:GOOD JOB ITS GREAT


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