What do u think of this then??? 10 points?

I love spring



My life as a child was brilliant,

I lived in a farm-house with loads of animals, Dogs barking, cats slurping their milk hungrily,

Ponies munching in the fields, tadpoles growing Into frogs at spring time, flowers giving there Smell to the air, rabbits hopping in the run Chasing each other, chickens laying warm Eggs for us to eat, in the night foxes stalking for There prey, owls hooting to each other keeping There eyes peeled for rodents,

Morning came, and the grass sparkled, grass Hoppers making noise, birds tweeting to there Babies, Beas buzzing over the long grass, rain Comes, birds hide, ponies sleep, winter is here, Chickens tucked up cosy and warm inside There pen, rabbis shake and shiver all the ran Off, then the tweeting of the birds goes and the crickets are making noise no more, dogs and Cats sit by the warm fire drying all the rain off Them, come spring please come back quick, I wake up one moring three months later, I Look outside my window and see birds Tweeting as they are building there nests, beas Buzzing around the flowers looking for pollen, Cats slurping there milk dogs going wild on the Lawn, I dress quickly and go outside, I smell the Sweet grass and grin,

SPRING IS BACK!!

What do u think of this then??? 10 points?
It sounds nice, but check your spelling. Be careful which "there" you use, and use "bees" not "beas." There is a lot of capitalization in the middle of sentences, but that is okay if that is where a line begins in your poem. One thing you should change is "rabbits shake and shiver all the rain off" not "rabbis shake and shiver all the ran off." All in all, it sounds pretty good.
Reply:yea, not bad.. you live in beautiful and nature place, in a fresh air, i love some kind of these too.. i love bugs..i was looking for praying mantis, and i guess in what you live here must be many.. and i also love insects singing, like cicada, cricket..

Waterhens sound.. i appreciate your life, even though you're not living in town, in a farm-house, you enjoy peaceful forever :)
Reply:I think this was written with great enthusiasm, and it is easy to see why you love spring. Now go back and run spellcheck (and grammar check if you have it), and repost. I'll help you with the rest.
Reply:I think the content is alright, but you just need to paraphrase and do a spelling and grammar check. And you'll be fine. =)



Gd luck!
Reply:that really shows that you love spring and it was quit vivid in deital i like spring cause frog come bag

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