Is this an effective introduction to my short story?

It is for school =] ..



Dry twigs, sheltered by the overcrowded branches of the sycamore trees overhead snap beneath my shuffling feet, echoing around the small opening like a shout in a tunnel. The sharp, strong smell of rotting leaves and wild flowers hang around in the sweltering heat, causing me to wince and my eyes to water. It was exactly how I had remembered; protective, safe, my own secret haven from the world. Memories flood back to me from my childhood; a scraped knee from climbing a tree, a game of hide and seek among the prickly bushes, the adrenaline rush given from a ride on the rope-swing. That rope swing. All that remains of it is a short frayed piece of discoloured rope which I twist solemnly through my fingers, savouring the memories it brings.



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Is this an effective introduction to my short story?
I am a published author, and I liked it. I usually can find things to tear apart, but this sounds very good. There are perhaps one or two words, where I might have chosen different ones, but the overall is good enough that they are hardly worth mentioning.



Keep up this level of writing and you will be on the best-seller list for sure.





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added note: I would love to tell, but this is not the name under which I write, and I wish to keep this identity separate from the other name. Anyway, who knows? --maybe you have already read some of my work... Just read what interests you and keep up the good work.
Reply:I think that's an effective opening. It really sets the scene and and it makes the reader feel like they're there. You can expect a good mark!
Reply:thats really good. how many books are you writing?? lol or is it the same one?? well i wanna read em!!! email them to me PLEASE!!!!!! lol ok well ttyl
Reply:Um, can you send me the rest! Thats great! You had a lot of detail. Thats always good. It made me feel like I was that person, its crazy. Very good job.